Is my sales copy any better now? (NO product available)

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bigfoot12

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There is no product available on this sales page, so you WILL NOT be able to buy anything!

Sales page made using leadpages.net template

https://freemealplanstoloseweight.leadpages.net/landingpage1/

Does this sound more credible than what I did last time? I am just trying to be myself, instead of trying to sound like a salesperson.

No available testimonials at this time. "Blah blah blah" will be replacing these fields
 


The only real way to find out if your copy will work is to test it. Split test different versions until you find a winner. Your potential customers will tell you how good your copy is by how they react to it.
 
I don't like the headline, it's too ambiguous. You need to be specific in your headlines.

Eg. 3 Simple Steps To Instantly Increasing The Quality Of Your Life 100% Naturally

But even with this I still don't think it's specific enough. Maybe it'd be better to switch your whole "better life" promise to something like "destroy depression" (or something else that works for you).

So if you changed that a new headline would be a bit better:

3 Simple Steps To Instantly Destroy Depression & Increase The Quality Of Your Life 100% Naturally

Basically the main problem is you need to figure out exactly what you're helping them achieve. It'll also be easier to pull traffic if you are in a specific niche instead of just general wellbeing.
 
Yeah, I wasn't sure about the headline either.
I was never really good at making up titles and headlines.

What is your opinion on the rest of the sales copy?


Is it ok to start with "Hello Reader"
Does it read well?
Is it credible-without any hype?
Is it interesting?
 
Since you're just learning this what I'd suggest is you find a salesletter you like and know is successful, then rewrite it but keep the format pretty much the same.

When I was starting my own sales letters sucked so this was a good exercise to see exactly what works and why it works. By rewriting you'll also need to think about why a certain sentence works how it elicits reader's emotions.

You will also have a good starting point because you'll eliminate a big part of uncertainty out of the equation. Then once you have a sales letter that works you can write your own ones from ground up and test against it.

I usually started with "Dear Friend," and that seemed to work well, but still I think that instead of trying to fix specific parts of your page you're better off by finding a solid swipe... you'll waste less time and get better results faster.
 
OK LOL now I see what you were talking about in the other thread. Now to answer your question you have to be completely honest about how much you believe in your own product. A sales page like this is what you do when you have a garbage product you hope to talk some morons into buying.

This is how real books are sold:
Detect Deceit: How to Become a Human Lie Detector in Under 60 Minutes by David Craig | NOOK Book (eBook), Paperback | Barnes & Noble

1. A legitimate distributor - You can publish ebooks through all the big guys now. You get crazy potential for distribution, perceived legitimacy, an effortless buying process and can target all the major devices in a native format.

2. The overview is your sales copy. On a lot of these self help books it's pretty salesy, but not desperate. For the most part it's genuinely informative but done with a favorable slant towards the author and content.

3. The price is right there. $15 is pretty reasonable. You really don't have to prequalify people before you show them that.

4. There are reviews. If you have a decent product you'll welcome honest reviews since they're worth more to a customer than anything coming out of your mouth.

5. There's a sample. When you buy books in the store you read a bit first and the same thing happens online. The best way to sell a good book is to let someone start and get them hooked. If you actually believe in your product there's no excuse not to let that happen.

Now if you're trying to pull a fast one then work the sales page, but if you're actually an author and not a bullshit artist it doesn't make any sense to go that route.
 
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