Okay here goes, review my landing page

[Rockpile]

Ok Im trying the "Mikes guide to converting zips/emails" thing again. Here is the link, let me know what you think. (please dont click the buttons)

Corey Delaney Party Planner

 

[RockDiesel]

in my opinion i wouldnt say "complete the offer". that makes it sound the visitor has to work to get their visa gift card. just say something like "enter your email to receive your free gift card"

 

[tombo100]

Also, Try to wrap the copy around the video so that the reader does not have to scroll. Once that happens your question is off the page and that probably hurts your conversions.

Let us know if the idea converts.

 

[Rockpile]

Im getting an pretty good CTR from the ads +10% but not conversions yet. I will try your suggestions and report back

 

[Trademark]

I'd go with simpler colors on your lander.

I don't know that market well. But, you have pink, orange, yellow, a couple shades of blue with a striped background. That's too busy.

One more thing... the video takes a couple of minutes to play. That's a long time for someone to remain on that lander. Even if they skip the video and choose to read the text, it's white text on a dark background. Too hard to read. The impulse click is more likely to be on the back button than on one of the orange buttons.

Again, my disclaimer... I'm ignorant about that market. Maybe that stuff works. But, it'd surprise me if it did.

Hope that helps.

 

[PlanetAndrea]

in my opinion i wouldnt say "complete the offer". that makes it sound the visitor has to work to get their visa gift card. just say something like "enter your email to receive your free gift card"

that was my first thought too.. complete the offer is like saying "fill all of this out" - keep it simple.. "get $500 gift card" or something like that