Feedback on my PPV Series

[pickledegg]

I've been putting together a short 5 parter about PPV landers, and I'd appreciate a bit of feedback.

Here's part three PPV Landing Pages Under The Spotlight Part 3 - Features and Benefits - GetlandersgetpaidGetlandersgetpaid

Hope it proves useful for anyone new to this stuff, pretty basic but hopefully a helpful resource.

 

[joevis]

This just in, sell benefits not features.

 

[pickledegg]

This just in, sell benefits not features.

Hope it proves useful for anyone new to this stuff, pretty basic but hopefully a helpful resource.

Perhaps you can appreciate that its for beginners? and maybe pass some constructive feedback?

 

[megatabbers]

I like your use of FAB, but your benefits are still advantages. You have to go one step further and spell it out for the reader:

Advantage: "Allows you to maintain speed while taking corners..." here's what this means to you Mr. Prospect, (insert benefit here; e.g. now you can ride like a pro without worrying about wiping out. Not only that, but when you get challenged to a race by some dipshit in a "supercar", you'll them far behind to eat your dust).

That's obviously a ridiculous example, but you get the point.

 

[pickledegg]

I like your use of FAB, but your benefits are still advantages. You have to go one step further and spell it out for the reader:

Advantage: "Allows you to maintain speed while taking corners..." here's what this means to you Mr. Prospect, (insert benefit here; e.g. now you can ride like a pro without worrying about wiping out. Not only that, but when you get challenged to a race by some dipshit in a "supercar", you'll them far behind to eat your dust).

That's obviously a ridiculous example, but you get the point.

Thanks megatabbers you have a good point there, I guess it didnt come across clearly enough in my 'deeper benefits'.

Thanks dude.