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I've never had any success with offers like that (filling out forms/ surveys)
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This^....
I've never had any success with offers like that (filling out forms/ surveys)
Make is easier for people going to your site to know what to read and what to do, who wants to read all that? its just a email submit, you dont ahve to get them to breing out their CC oor anything,
keep it simple man, and focus on getting cheap traffic
keep it simple man, and focus on getting cheap traffic
I dunno shit about landing pages or how they should be setup but if I were to compare it against other landing pages I've been to in the past, it fails.
The "HOLY FUCKING SHIT I NEED TO BUY THIS PRODUCT!!1!" urge is like a 0.3 out of 10 with this landing page of yours. Needs more awesome.
The "HOLY FUCKING SHIT I NEED TO BUY THIS PRODUCT!!1!" urge is like a 0.3 out of 10 with this landing page of yours. Needs more awesome.
From one newbie to another... it cries 'gimicky'.
That button pretty much insults the reader. I feel like I just got spyware from clicking on your link. I would start by switching to a more 'fluid' template, after all, you're promoting new technology, not a Nintendo. Rounded corners with narrow headers just look modern. Tighten up the paragraphs a bit (looks too spacey) and proofread.
That button pretty much insults the reader. I feel like I just got spyware from clicking on your link. I would start by switching to a more 'fluid' template, after all, you're promoting new technology, not a Nintendo. Rounded corners with narrow headers just look modern. Tighten up the paragraphs a bit (looks too spacey) and proofread.
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Site and content sucks, not legitimate... Make a screen capture showing your visitors what you want them to do. SEM on Yahoo and you might get an idiot to type in their email address.
Site and content sucks, not legitimate... Make a screen capture showing your visitors what you want them to do. SEM on Yahoo and you might get an idiot to type in their email address.
gamebred & Morethanbrains,
Thank you for your comments. I really appreciate them. I know its not great (its my first LP) but it helps to have comments from everyone on where to go with this. So what I am starting to gather is that everyone is saying make it simpler. I am no graphics designer so i can't make it pretty. Should I just go Short and Sweet on this one? A couple pictures, basic basic template and text only links, along with a short and simple paragraph on what to do?
Thank you for your comments. I really appreciate them. I know its not great (its my first LP) but it helps to have comments from everyone on where to go with this. So what I am starting to gather is that everyone is saying make it simpler. I am no graphics designer so i can't make it pretty. Should I just go Short and Sweet on this one? A couple pictures, basic basic template and text only links, along with a short and simple paragraph on what to do?
It's been said already, but cloak your links:
Make a new text file on your computer, name it ipad.php
In this text file type:
<?php header( 'Location: http://www.youruglyaffiliatelink.com' ) ;?>Upload this to your site's main folder.
Change all those links to go to eCommerce Hosting from YourSite.Com
Make a new text file on your computer, name it ipad.php
In this text file type:
<?php header( 'Location: http://www.youruglyaffiliatelink.com' ) ;?>Upload this to your site's main folder.
Change all those links to go to eCommerce Hosting from YourSite.Com
Fix the header if you want an opinion... Then change the color a bit to match... The content and picture are good and the general layout of them is pretty cool... Now if you want to buy a whole bunch of IPAD related urls I own, heehehehehehehehe already that would be good for this, let me know!!!! LOL :banana_sml:
