So why don't you just ask him? You have a far better chance of your friend helping you out.
I'm new to this forum! Please critique my website
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So why don't you just ask him? You have a far better chance of your friend helping you out.
Ya? Well fuck him. Mr. I-Don't-Know-Anything-About-CPA-But-Help-Me-Build-A-LP-To-Sell-CPA-Advice.
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I just wasted 4 minutes zoned out in awe of how stupid this thread is...and for all you suckers who did the same thing...I will save it with this...three hot tripplets...naked... at least it was worth getting to the bottom now...
I didn't find the copy very compelling. For example, the big red text didn't make me want to read the rest of what you wrote (and I didn't). There is a reason why a good copy writer will cost you anywhere from $1,000 or more to create an effective page like this (assuming you wrote that yourself, you should probably hire someone).
But...if done right it could convert quite well. Good copy will rope the reader in from the top and keep them reading to the bottom.
Fine...1 little thing...you start off with "I am Looking For..." noone gives a shit what you want....everyone only cares about themselves, so talk about what they get...and not features but benifiets. After every time you say a feature, add...."which means" and youll get to the heart of the benifiet...people are stupid...make it simple.
You might study up on when to use lose vs loose. And then maybe learn how to count to three. And those are just a couple of things that offended my eye in the ten seconds I was there.
i've read the rules and i think i can make the most of my common sense here. hope you could be nice. my pic is not me by the way, it's a korean artist i like
