Made my first landing page!

[ebrain]

" If I was looking for cologne online, the last thing I would give a shit about seeing is some other guys fucking armpit."

Thank you, you have restored my faith in men. I was just thinking, wtf? Do men see armpits and feel compelled to buy something? Do men now spray cologn in their armpits instead of using deodorant? Is this some kind of Man 2.0 that I rly don't want to know about?

Feel. Better.

 

[johnny-]

Thanks for all the advice guys and thanks to a certain user who wishes to remain nameless, he has been guiding me on IM and i have totally revamped the page and I will be sharing it this week, and no I never had plans to use it for people that think im that stupid. LOL

 

[ebrain]

Forgot to say that you're a brave man, johnny-. I'd never have the cojones to post up my first landing page. Good for you.

 

[AdHustler]

spelled cologne wrong in the headline

was just going to say he should probably learn to spell what he's selling.

 

[battlefork]

For me.

1. Hate the bg.
2. Why on earth would cologne ads need that long copy?

 

[smaxor]

EVERYTHING above the fold on something like that where the action button is the focus you see right off the bat.