What do you think about this as a landing page...

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I developed a script... quick landing pages

even though its a really simple script, I really like the style of the site, and I think it is pretty straight forward and lots of people will click... even if they dont read the product information...

here is an example of a landing page I made using the script: FatHealth.html

What is your opinion, not on actual content, but the layout of how its set up and everything...
 


My only gripe would be to big. Landing and Lead Generation pages need to be boxed unless they are those major sales ones.

All in all it looks nice. There should just be borders IMO.
 
Personally, I think it's FUGLY! It's so white it hurts my eyes and looks like something a 12 year old built.

But of course thats JMO. If it works, run with it.
 
abhorrent said:
Personally, I think it's FUGLY! It's so white it hurts my eyes and looks like something a 12 year old built.

But of course thats JMO. If it works, run with it.
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its not supposed to be the final product, your supposed to look at the script and learn to make your own/tweak it/ fix it up.
 
You can do better. That LP looks terrible, no offense. It looks like the type of HTML pages I used to get so hyped about making back in 97 when I was getting into HTML.

Just gotta add a BG and style the links
 
Guys, cut the man some slack. He's in the process of making the script. It's hardly like it's a final product that he's demanding we pay for at this point.

I think as a starting point, the script is good. It'll save a lot of people some time.

There are some major problems with the way it lays out the site, as people have mentioned.
See if you can get it working with some CSS as well, so that the basic layouts, particularly text, will have some decoration about them. As it is, the site looks like it was made in 1995, just after <img> was made into a standardised tag and Eudora was all the rage because it would load JPEGs without an external codec (yes, I have been using the net that long... longer in fact... sad, no?), and in this day and age, that sceams "scam!" to me.
The page itself should be in a central column that's a fixed width, whilst the surrounding columns are elastic, and content-less.
White backgrounds need border imagery to offset them. Considering it's weight loss, a soft blue, for the calming effect.
Also see if you can get it so that the picture is inset into the paragraph. It will make it look more like an actual article.
Finally, get it to use a different font for your <h?> tags, and maybe even have it set to do it in smallcaps.

Unfortunately, I'm no coder, so I can't help you with the program itself, but I'm sure some of the other people here might be interested in taking a look under the hood.
 
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