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I'm trying to take advantage of the swine flu hysteria, so I very hastily set up this landing page for an offer I found a few hours ago.

Swine Flu Protection - Strengthen Your Immune System!

Site is an almost direct rip from the product page.

Now, I've never used a sales letter as a LP, and this one is long as fuck. Should I trim it down, leave it alone, completely scrap it, etc? I've gotten around 125 clicks today, 10ish click throughs, and 0 leads.
 


You might want to try putting pictures near the testies and edit: copying the authors picture up to when her name is mentioned earlier in the picture, also, maybe try a different picture of the female

Also, the headline is a bit confusing (at least to me, i had to read it three times to understand it), maybe it was just me...also, you may want to replace conventional medicine with something more colloquial like doctors or pharmaceutical companies

Oh, and you might want to add some brighter colors like a blue background instead of gray. the sales letter looks sort of drowsy instead of fast and exciting

Edi
 
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The same answer as everything else.... TEST IT!!!

If i had to guess, her order page is fucking horrible and id guess it won't convert for shit.
You are taking people from one page with a load of text to another page with a load of text that looks exactly the same, until you get BELOW the fold where the order form is. Find a new offer if you can, this one looks crap.

If its the only one id try shortening the landing page and split test them.
 
yeah, way too much reading. study a few berriez landers and adapt.

nice to see you copied her copyright in the process though
© 2009 Mom's Defense, LLC. All Rights Reserved.
 
Bad English in the headline:
"Tried Hiding From You" -> "Tried to Hide From You" or just "Tried to Hide"
 
Than why in the name of Godzilla are the LP's for these fucking E-books so HUGE ?

They obviously work or these assclowns wouldn't use them

I have always wondered about that!
 
rawbones said:
Than why in the name of Godzilla are the LP's for these fucking E-books so HUGE ?

They obviously work or these assclowns wouldn't use them

I have always wondered about that!
Click to expand...

Because the sheeples read the headline & then buy & then download & then never take action & then if they do take action they realise they still aren't making money & then... ALL GLORY TO THE HYPNOCAKE
 
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you don't even have the words "swine flue" in the copy anywhere above the fold??!?!?!? it should be in the headline....

Also, if you're gonna take the sales letter approach, make it like an actual letter:

"Dear _____,
I want to blah blah blah blah.

And put a picture of "you" in the top right with a caption of your "credentials"
 
Just take your average acai blog reword it to say it prevents swine flu instead of focusing on losing weight. Images should be of pigs, and people using masks. Also Just link to an Acai offer it will probably convert better.

1 Swine Flu Rule: Obey
1 Rule to Swine Flu
Oprah's Swine Flu Rule: Obey
Oprah prevented the Swine flu by obeying this 1 rule.

Boom profit

edit: this could draw a lot of negative heat very quickly so I wouldn't recommend doing it kind of like Obama Grants... http://www.bmighty.com/blog/main/archives/2009/04/swineflu_outbre.html
 
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